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Thirteen chairs
Black coats are worn
This is where Number XIV was born

Alone and silent
Things could be worse
Number XIII noticed her first

Salty yet sweet
First one she had
She realized they weren't all that bad

Warm summer sunsets
Three friends together
Xion knew it couldn't last forever

Not real at all
Look at his leer
XIV starts to realize her fear

Reprogrammed by I
Now on the clock tower
Xion uses all of XIII's power

A fall, defeat
Salt tears run
No more days underneath the sun

Roxas, not ready!
Fight Xemnas never.
Even though he'll forget forever

Dark storm clouds
Raindrop kisses
We all know who Xion misses
A very emotional moment for me, here. I came across the idea for this last night, and HAD to write it down. I modified it abit, but i'm not completely satisfied with the result. However, I love the last verse....paragraph thing.

This is my pathetic attempt to poetry. I can't can't CAN'T do it!! >O GAAAH. Well, i'd love to hear what you think. I'm really tired right now but...yeah..sorry if i'm not making sense.

I really tried to see things from her point of view, because I think her's is alittle deeper...not saying anything against Roxas. :3 i love that lil guy. -fansquee- :la:

Please, if you fave, tell me why. I'd like to hear it. Thanks for reading, and goodnight

This poem © Eoteflickr, please don't use as your own. I will KILL you, kay? :D
Xion, Roxas, everyone mentioned © Squeenix, Disney
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ShamanGirl1 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
this is good, but sad ):
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espeon40 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*Sob* so sad, yet happy, but mostly sad. *sob* I loved that game I think it was the third game to make me cry, first being pokemon dungeon red, then pokemon dungeon darkness....
*sobs, sniff*
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AkuaSeaWolf Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011
You just resummarized 358/2 days...
All the memories and emotional that I felt while playing just flooded back into me...
Thank you for this poem
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RabidRoxasFangirl Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011
is she talkin bout roxy?
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akizarulez Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
*cries*
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Death-By-Grunge Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011
I'm crying...
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011  Student Writer
D: Sorry to make you cry!
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Death-By-Grunge Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011
No no,they're happy tears.
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sonnydey Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
Dooope poetry foool!! oh yes. and the last verse is deep. everyone knows what raindrop kisses are even if though the cant quite put a finger on the sensation of having one touch your heart and cause your stomach to drop a few inches lower. This is good shtuff.
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Writer
:iconimhappyplz: th-thanks!
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scarletwing14 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow ur good at poetry
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010  Student Writer
owo thank you very much! o_O' i always thought i really sucked at it...
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scarletwing14 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well u dont :3
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mrcrazy11 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2010
O_O this poem even makes me sad WAAHHH
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2010  Student Writer
aaw I sowrry. :S
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PumpkinCoocie Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010
aww~ :heart:
this is so sweet!
I love it!!! :meow:
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010  Student Writer
thank you! :iconfeelingfreeplz:
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:iconpumpkincoocie:
PumpkinCoocie Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010
You´re welcome :tighthug:
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:iconhitsukai:
hitsukai Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010
i :heart: this poem
really
:)
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2010  Student Writer
:tighthug: thank you!!
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AX0RT Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010
~~~AAAAAHHHH IT'S XION
very cute LOVE it so much

and... very sad so much...
DAMN that POEM who making it!!??
you really makes my Tears COULD NOT STOP
T-T to sad....
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AX0RT Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010
ugh lagged i send it 2 times...
sorry..
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AX0RT Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010
~~~AAAAAHHHH IT'S XION
very cute LOVE it so much

and... very sad so much...
DAMN that POEM who making it!!??
you really makes my Tears COULD NOT STOP
T-T to sad....
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Aroselia Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG this is REALLY awesome!!
No, you do not fail at poetry~!! >_<
((Someone posted a link of this in some forums, so I came to read..))
It almost made me cry...because Xion's story is so sad...>.<. But that means this poem is really good!! I love it!! ^.^
~Aroselia~
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Student Writer
someone posted this in a forum? o_O say waaaaaaah?! :O
:hug: aaw thank you, I always try to make people feel the emotion..I guess that's why I like writing!
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Aroselia Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol, yes. It was in the Xion fanclub on KHInsider...we always share fanart/stuff we like in the fanclubs there ^.^
I love writing too...I'm glad you wrote this :D :hug:
~Aroselia~
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Student Writer
O_O WOW i'm...uh..honored. jeez thank you for telling me. Could you..give me a link? -shock-

thank you. :heart:
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Aroselia Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
[link]
At the bottom of the post they posted 3 links to stuff on DA, and your poem is there ^.^
((I'm not sure how the post will look without being signed in on the forums, though...))
Np :heart:
~Aroselia~
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Student Writer
Wow.... :aww: I feel important now! :XD: thanks again
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Aroselia Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Heheh, yay~! ^.^
And np :)
~Aroselia~
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UnknowKH2 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010
That scene was so sad. Sadder in Japanese. I liked it a lot, your poem. I think you didn't have to rhyme some of the words, but that's not me.
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Student Writer
I totally agree...but when I DON'T rhyme, it seems very.....strange. I'm actually working on how to make non rhyming one right now. Thanks for the comment. :)
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UnknowKH2 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010
You're welcome. Well if you read my Xion or any of my poetry then you might find a way to right with no rhyming. Or you could be a person who always rhymes.
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ShionXIV Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2010
aww *tears* this so sweet ;w;
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Student Writer
:heart: aaw, thanks!
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ShionXIV Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
np :)
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IhateBarney Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2010
This is great! I wish I was as talented as you, but all my poems suck
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Student Writer
:huggle: thanks alot!! :XD: I'm sure all of them are just fine! I'd like to read one, you may be surprised by what people think!
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IhateBarney Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010
Rlly well i have a poem about Roxas and Xion, would you like to read it, itsok if u dont
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Student Writer
of course, I'd love to hear it!
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IhateBarney Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010
kk heres the link:

[link]
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010  Student Writer
wow it's really good, I love it! :heart:
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IhateBarney Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2010
really? well, thank you
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Kera-X Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:tears: that is so sad. I didn't finish KH 358 1/2 days but I knew she died. I am so sad now. But that is an amazingly beautiful poem.
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010  Student Writer
:huggle: thanks so much. A good birthday present is a comment like this.
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Kera-X Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh it's your birthday?! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!
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eoteflickr Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010  Student Writer
:XD: thank you!!
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Kera-X Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome
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clausevolca Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2010
This poem is amazing, i wish i was good at poems now >.<. =^.^=
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